Friday Fictioneers 1-4-13


As you are starting to get use to, today is Friday Fictioneers
Thank you Rochelle for hosting this amazing group.

All you writers try it at least once. Try it all alone in your own private world. Just try it, it’s amazing and I promise you’ll get hooked.

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** Fireworks **

I had too much. I didn’t want to go watch the fireworks. I needed to work all these problems out, before the stress made me crazy.
David wasn’t willing to let this tradition go this year.

There’s no explaining to a child. I made sure he was bundled and warm and out we went.

I could hear his “ooohs” and “aaaahhs” right after the boom rumbled through my head. I squeezed his hand tightly in mine.

My mind wondered through all its nonsense.

“Boom”

It rattled me.
The pieces came into place. My own brain’s sparks rivaled those in the air.

Word Count: 101
One over but that’s okay.



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31 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers 1-4-13

  1. I like the way you set the scene. I’m a little confused by the ending, though – did the experience of watching the fireworks help to clarify her problem so she knows how to deal with things now? Or what?

    • mari wells says:

      Thank you for stopping by and commenting.

      I’m not really sure if the fireworks helped or if getting out of the house into fresh air and having a different perspective is what helped.

  2. boomiebol says:

    Nicely done Mari…

  3. Nice, Mari. I like your last part about the sparks in your mind rivaling the fireworks. It doesn’t sound like she is in a good state. Probably the last thing she wants is to be watching fireworks!

    • mari wells says:

      She really didn’t want to be out watching fireworks, but how do you explain that to a child. They don’t understand Mommy is crazy stressed. They pout which adds more stress. It did her good to get out though.

      Thanks for coming by.

  4. the last part, after “Boom” , my favorite. I’ve had that happen, all the pieces fall into place suddenly. I love those “aha” moments.

  5. Mari, it sounds as though inspiration finally came and David got his fun time, too. Good deal!

  6. billgncs says:

    it seemed to me, his delight was infectious. I very much enjoyed this read.

  7. tedstrutz says:

    I guess, sometimes you need to just say no to work, and what you think is important, and give in to some fun. Everything seems to work out.

  8. When the weather’s nice, a long motorcycle ride tends to dislodge things in my head. That’s where I’ve had some of my best aha moments.
    Good for David, she needed to get out.

  9. I’ve been there. so weighed down by emotions, thoughts, and stress I just want to wallow in it. Children never let you. They demand your attention. That’s a good thing. Wallowing is not healthy.

  10. Robert Gregory says:

    Nice story! Pretty complex in its ambiguity, if I may hurl some big words around lol! I liked it. Had to read it twice for it to hit, which is good. I like those kinds of stories. I think the main character/protagonist might be glad she went through with the tradition. Maybe the fireworks was just what she needed to fight through problems’ weight.

  11. rich says:

    “David wasn’t willing to let this tradition go this year.”

    101? okay. try…

    “David wasn’t willing to skip this tradition this year.”

  12. dmmacilroy says:

    Dear Mari,

    A good effort from an enigmatic prompt. Well done.

    Aloha,

    Doug

  13. Abraham says:

    I like it. Especially the way you leave the ‘Boom!’ in her thoughts open to interpretation.
    Well done.

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